Breanna, this is a good topic sentence, which catches this readers attention. But don't stop. You could discuss what you consider to be beautiful personally, such as types of features, dress, style, poise, and so on. You could also discuss the stereotypes we see in the media and in magazines. In fact, each of these journal topics should not be treated like you are answering a question, but should, in fact be the beginning of Breanna voicing her opinion and relating her experiences. As you can see here, I've written more in my comment than you did in your response to the writing prompt for Chanclas.
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Breanna, this is a good topic sentence, which catches this readers attention. But don't stop. You could discuss what you consider to be beautiful personally, such as types of features, dress, style, poise, and so on. You could also discuss the stereotypes we see in the media and in magazines. In fact, each of these journal topics should not be treated like you are answering a question, but should, in fact be the beginning of Breanna voicing her opinion and relating her experiences. As you can see here, I've written more in my comment than you did in your response to the writing prompt for Chanclas.
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